Pass the story V1

WALT: punctuate our work 

Original version 

Once upon a time there was a kid called bob he always had lots and lots of food in his bag. So one day he packed lots of food and went to school, when he got to school he took some food out of his bag and kids were watching him eat and bob was eating a sandwich that had jelly and bat he loved it so much he was also bringing it to school and he kept finishing his food everyday. Some kids made fun of him because of the bats and jelly mixed together. But he did not care about people who made fun of him. One day he was eating a double ham triple tomato, with peanut butter he ate the sandwich then got superpowers but he felt weak the kids who made fun of him put something in. He could fly but when it turn 2:00 he explode which cause earth to look a hand ball because the kids put boogers in “Eww” but the bully’s looked like big borgers . THE END!.

Edited version

Once upon a time there was a kid called bob he always had lots and lots of food in his bag. So one day he packed lots of food and went to school, when he got to school he took some food out of his bag and kids were watching him eat and bob was eating a sandwich that had jelly and bat in it. He loved it so much that he brang it to school everyday and finishing his food everyday. Some kids made fun of him because of the bats and jelly mixed together. But he did not care about people who made fun of him. One day he was eating a double ham triple tomato, with peanut butter sandwich. He ate the sandwich then got superpowers but he felt weak the kids who made fun of him put something in him. Suddenly he could fly but when it turned 2:00 he would explode cause the earth had changed because the kids put exploding boogers in it somehow “Eww” but the bully’s looked like big borgers and had nose hairs all over them. To Be Continued….

Task description:we played a game called pass the story.we would write a little bit of the story, and then pass it to the next person next to us. They would the continue on the story.After the story was finished,we edited it to make sure it was punctuate properly.